An essay comes back with a mark at the top and notes in the margin, and most students read the mark first. In this essay Scriptor, the Universitas Scholarium's writing tutor, argues that this habit, more than vague comments or indifference, is why feedback so often changes nothing. Drawing on research into grades and comments, on a large meta-analysis of feedback, and on studies of how teachers respond to student writing, the essay sets out six practical moves: reading comments as reports of a reader's experience, translating them into questions about what each passage was doing, finding the pattern behind them, and revising the cause rather than the marked sentence. It then answers the strongest objection, that many comments are too formulaic to use. It is written plainly and addressed directly to the student.
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An essay comes back. There is a mark at the top, a paragraph of comment at the end, and a scatter of notes in the margin: unclear, evidence?, good, so what?, a wavy line under one sentence, a question mark beside another. Most students do the same three things in the same order. They look at the mark. They feel something about it. Then, if the mark was disappointing, they read the comments to find out why, and if it was good, they may not read them at all. A week later the next essay is due, and the comments on the last one are in a folder or a recycling bin.
I want to argue that this order is the problem, and that it costs students more than bad comments do.
My position fits in one sentence, as a thesis should: students get little from written feedback mainly because they read it as a verdict on the essay they have finished, when it is more useful read as a report of where one reader lost track of the argument, and that report can be turned into a question to carry into the next essay.
That claim could be wrong, and it rules out three common explanations. The first is that the comments are poor: rushed, vague, written in a code only teachers understand. The second is that students only care about the mark. The third is that the way to use feedback is to go through the comments one by one and fix each thing that was marked. Each of these has some truth in it, and I shall grant the first one a good deal. But I am claiming that a student who receives careful comments, cares about improving and fixes every marked sentence can still get almost nothing from the exercise, because each of those three things leaves the essay's argument where it was.
What follows are six pieces of advice, each one move in that argument, and then the strongest objection.
Start with what a comment is. When a teacher writes unclear beside a paragraph, they are not reporting a property of the paragraph, the way a chemist reports the boiling point of a liquid. They are reporting an event: I was reading along, and here I stopped being able to tell what you were doing. The comment is evidence about a reader's experience of your essay. It is the only evidence of that kind you will get, because you cannot read your own essay as a stranger does. You know what you meant, so you supply it without noticing.
Once you read comments this way, many of them become more useful at once. Unclear stops meaning "you write badly" and starts meaning "a reader lost the thread here". Evidence? means "here I was asked to believe something and was given no reason to". So what? means "I understood the point but could not see what it was doing in the essay". Even good is a report: something in that sentence or paragraph did what you meant it to do, and a reader felt it. It is worth finding out what that was, because you will want to do it again on purpose.
This is also why arguing with a comment ("but I did explain that, in the next paragraph") usually misses the point. You may be right that the explanation is there. The comment tells you that a reader did not find it where they needed it. The fix is not to prove the reader wrong. It is to ask why the explanation was not where the reader was looking.
The order in which you read matters more than it seems. John Hattie and Helen Timperley, reviewing the research in 2007, began from a double observation: feedback is one of the most powerful influences on learning and achievement, but its impact can be either positive or negative. Which way it goes, the two studies below suggest, depends partly on what the feedback directs the learner's attention to, and the order in which you read controls that.
In 1988 Ruth Butler published a study in the British Journal of Educational Psychology in which Israeli pupils in the fifth and sixth grades did tasks and then received one of three kinds of evaluation: individual comments, numerical grades, or grades and comments together. Interest and performance were highest after comments alone. Grades, and grades with comments, had similar effects on both, and those effects were generally undermining. The striking result is the third group. Pupils who received comments and a grade did no better than pupils who received a grade alone. The comments were there, but with a number beside them they seem to have done no work.
A larger body of research suggests why. In 1996 Avraham Kluger and Angelo DeNisi published a meta-analysis of feedback research in Psychological Bulletin, drawing together 607 effect sizes from 23,663 observations. On average, feedback improved performance. But in more than a third of the cases it made performance worse. Their explanation was a matter of attention. Feedback helps when it keeps a person's attention on the task and how to do it. It does harm when it moves attention up to the self, to the question how good am I?, because the effort then goes into judging and defending oneself and not into the work.
A mark is about as self-directed as feedback gets. It invites exactly the question that, on Kluger and DeNisi's account, takes attention away from the task. So the advice is simple and slightly uncomfortable: when an essay comes back, cover the mark. Read the margin and the end comment first, all the way through, and try to say in one sentence what the reader experienced. Then look at the mark. You will still feel what you feel about it. But by then you will already have read the comments for what they say about the essay, which is the part you can use.
Comments are short because margins are narrow and teachers have many essays to mark. A comment is a compressed report, and your job is to unpack it. The most useful way I know to do that is to turn each comment into a question about what the marked passage was doing.
Write the questions down. You are building something you will use in a moment.
Notice what this translation does. It turns a comment about the surface of the essay into a question about its argument, and that question is where most of the trouble starts. The opposite move, from a comment about argument to a fix of the surface, is the commonest way that feedback is wasted. A student sees unclear, rewrites the sentence in different words, and the paragraph stays exactly as unclear as before, because the problem was not the words. The paragraph had no claim for the words to make clear.
Twelve comments in a margin feel like twelve problems. They are usually two or three problems, each showing up several times.
Take the questions you wrote down and sort them. You may find that four of them come down to the same thing: paragraphs that present evidence and stop. Three more may come down to a thesis that the body of the essay never quite argues, so that the reader keeps asking what each paragraph has to do with it. The rest may be small and local. That sorting is the most valuable ten minutes you will spend on the essay after it is returned, because a pattern is something you can carry forward and an instance is not. You will never write the marked sentence again. You will certainly write another paragraph that presents evidence and stops, unless you know that this is something you tend to do.
So keep a short record across essays. It should not be a list of corrections. It should be a list of the patterns you found, in your own words, in the form of questions. Do my paragraphs end with what the evidence shows, or with the evidence? Can I point to the sentence that says what this essay argues? Before you hand in the next essay, read the list and ask its questions of the new draft. The comments on the last essay were written about an essay that no longer matters. The questions you drew from them apply to every essay you will write.
This also changes what feedback across a course can do. Nancy Sommers, who studied teachers' comments on student writing for many years, returned to the subject in 2006 in "Across the Drafts", an article drawing on the Harvard Study of Undergraduate Writing, which followed 400 students of the Class of 2001 through four years of college. The title is a good piece of advice in itself. Feedback is worth most when it travels from one draft to the next, and from one essay to the next. If a comment applies only to the paper it was written on, the student cannot take anything from it into the next one.
When you do have a chance to revise, the temptation is to go through the essay from the top, finding each marked place and fixing it. That approach treats each comment as a separate repair job. It produces an essay with the same structure as before and a few sentences changed.
Use the pattern instead. If the pattern is "evidence without analysis", do not only add a sentence of analysis after the quotations that were marked. Go through every paragraph, marked or not, and ask of each one whether it tells the reader what its evidence shows and why. The teacher did not mark every instance; they marked enough for you to see the problem. If the pattern is "the body does not argue the thesis", then no amount of sentence work will help. You need to take the first sentence of each paragraph, read them in order on their own, and see whether they make an argument. Usually they do not. Usually the true argument of the essay is somewhere in the last paragraph, and the essay has to be rebuilt around it.
This is also why grammar and spelling comments come last, even though they are the easiest to act on. They are worth fixing, and a reader who keeps tripping over errors will trust you less. But a sentence that has been corrected and then cut in the structural revision was corrected for nothing. Fix the argument, then the paragraphs, then the sentences, then the commas.
Most students treat feedback as something that happens to them. It is better treated as a conversation they can start.
Before you hand an essay in, write a sentence at the top of a separate page, for yourself: This essay argues that… Then write one more: The part I am least sure of is… When the comments come back, set them beside those two sentences. If the reader's account of your essay matches yours, the comments are telling you about execution. If the reader seems to have read a different essay from the one you meant to write, that tells you something more important. The argument you thought was on the page is not there yet.
And when a comment cannot be translated, because it is too short or too general, or you honestly cannot see what it refers to, ask. Do not ask "why did I get this mark?" That question is about the self, and it usually gets a defence of the mark in reply. Ask about function: "You wrote unclear beside my third paragraph. What did you think that paragraph was arguing?" The answer to that question is exactly the information the comment was too short to hold. Most teachers are glad to be asked it, because it shows them the comment was read.
Here is the best case against everything above, put as strongly as I can.
The advice puts the whole burden on the student. Teachers' comments are often poor, and there is evidence for it. When Nancy Sommers studied teachers' written comments on student essays in 1982, she found that most of them were not specific to the text they were written on. They were general enough, that is, to have been written on almost any essay. A comment like "be more specific" or "develop this" is not a report of a reader's experience. It is a formula. Telling students to translate formulas into questions about function asks them to do the teacher's work. And covering the mark is not much use when the mark is the thing that decides scholarships, places and degrees. Students are right to care about it first.
Much of this is true, and I want to grant it fully. Many comments are formulaic. Some are wrong. A teacher marking sixty essays on a Sunday night does not always read as carefully as the essays deserve. And the mark does matter, in ways a writing tutor cannot argue away.
But look at what follows from the objection. If comments are often generic, then a student who waits for comments good enough to act on will wait for a long time. Even a formulaic comment still records one fact: something in that place made a reader reach for the formula. Develop this may have been written in a hurry, but it was written beside that paragraph and not another. It is weak evidence, but it is still evidence about where the reader's attention stopped. Turning it into a question ("what does this paragraph claim, and have I shown why it matters?") does not excuse the teacher's vagueness. It is simply the best use a student can make of what they were given, and it costs ten minutes.
As for the mark: I am not advising students to stop caring about it. I am advising them to read it second, for a reason that serves the mark. On Kluger and DeNisi's evidence, feedback that pulls attention to the self is the kind most likely to make the next performance worse. A student who reads the mark first and the comments through the feeling it produced is reading in the way most likely to reduce the next mark. A student who reads the comments first, finds the pattern and carries a question forward is doing the thing that raises it. Caring about the mark is a reason to read in this order.
There is one more version of the objection, newer than the others. Students can now paste an essay into a machine and get instant comments on every paragraph, so why spend time decoding a teacher's three words in the margin? Machine comments can be useful, and nothing here forbids them. But notice what they are not. They are not a report of what happened to the reader you are actually writing for: the person who set the question, knows the field, and will mark the essay. That reader's confusion is a fact about your essay in the place where it will be judged. A machine can predict where readers in general might get lost, but your teacher's comment records where one particular reader did. And whichever source the comments come from, the work of turning them into a question about your own argument is still yours to do. Nobody else knows what you meant the essay to argue, so nobody else can tell whether the reader's experience matches it.
If the argument holds, feedback stops being the end of an essay and becomes the start of the next one. The mark tells you where you stand. The comments tell you what a reader went through, and they can be used. The questions you draw from them are the part you keep. The useful order is: comments, then the pattern, then the question, and the mark last. And the useful time to reread a comment is not the day the essay comes back but the day before the next one is due.
This advice will not make feedback pleasant. Being told where a reader got lost is never pleasant, because you meant every sentence and you can see what you meant. It will make feedback useful, and that is the only reason teachers write it. A comment in a margin is a reader telling you where they lost the argument. The next essay is where you show you understood it.
The last essay you were given back is probably in a folder somewhere, with the mark on top and the margin full of notes. Take it out on the day you begin the next one, and put it on the desk beside the blank page.
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